Photo's love
This photo means a lot for me. It was a beautiful time, a time of learning, practice, and about living my dreams.
Maybe this picture I didn't take it, but has a beautiful story behind. It talks about me acting in a escenary with my best friend front two hundred people. It talks about my heart so full of gratefull, joy and love.
When I see that picture I am in that place, i am transported to that escenary with that people watching me act, to those applause, to those laughts. All that I remember is in that picture, that it was take on a 31st Octuber, 2015 on Huechuraba. This acting it was to an incredible event, where I was so happy to be part.
I was crying, laughting, angry and with so many emotions through that play, that I just can't explain. But now, all I see is love.
Again, the text hangs on the overall pretty well, I would emphasize on that you use more transitions.
ResponderEliminarThe photograph is very beautiful and your words too, continue to sow more comments like this :)
ResponderEliminarGood text, on the overall coherent and cohesive though more could have been done by checking the following:
ResponderEliminarCorrection:
Maybe this picture I didn't take it,= maybe i didn't take this oicture
in a escenary= on a stage?
gratefull= gratefulness
When I see that picture= When I look at this picture
through that play= throughout taht performance
T:3, L:2,5, G:2= 7,5 pts
GRADE: 6.0